Tuesday, June 21, 2011

Tower Challenge Sixth Submission!

Haha! The sixth submission for my writing challenge! Note to Ellie: I'm sorry it took me this long to get your awesome story up at my blog. I've been a bit busy lately and Blogger won't let me comment on blogs with the drop-down comment menu {see previous post}. Anyway, I loved your story! :) Oh and I did a once-over for spelling and grammar, hope you don't mind.

The Towers of the Pah'jera and the Nal'jera {Tower Challenge}
by Ellie.
               “Vivacious tiki torchers!” Lezanne yelled, as was her general expression of wrathful excitation.
            This phrase, while startling to some, held no sway of president over the others in the room at that moment. This phrase in and of itself needs no further description, as it only appears frequently in our story.
            In fact, nobody paid attention to the aforementioned wiry blonde girl until she let out a second yelp, a word considered partially offensive in some circles and then a general screaming dance that drew the attention of Captain Nexley, who at the moment walked into the room.
            “They’re all over us!” burst forth from the captain’s radio.
            “Keep them back, men!” The captain’s reply was cut short by Lezanne who exclaimed:
            “Sir, they’ve got two more fleets of fighters bearing down from their fleet’s left flank. The transports are moving in to land. There’s nothing our men can do. Tiki torchers!”
            There was silence in the room. The captain turned back to his radio
            “Men, fight to your death. We will move the people now!”
            “Roger that sir.” The voice replied.
            There was a long pause as all the planet’s inhabitants, poised at the ready and listening in to the intercom turned grave faces to the sky where the last of their fleet was perishing to save them.
            “You’ve been good men.” The captain said hoarsely.
            “Thank you sir. We die doing our duty.” The voice replied, then clicked off the channel. The captain turned to address the room.
            “Execute plan 30456.” Into his radio: “Prepare for evacuation. Prep the portal. Code 22. Red squadron, keep an eye on logistics. Throw any blocks into the enemy’s path. I need the rest of the troops and able-bodied men to be ready to precede the women and children through the portal to the other side. We don’t know if the Nal’jera are still friendly. Prepare for the worst, hope for the best.”
            The group in the room set to work, flipping a number of switches and poking a quantity of buttons and all in all descending upon the room’s interior decoration (to whit, indescribable machinery) with such verve and gravity as to astonish any modern reader.
            Below, in the planet’s complex world of buildings and transport systems men and women rush hither and anon, for the most part congregating themselves and their choice of possessions in a central vertex of the city, a grand chamber directly below the great tower.
            The great tower’s many levels held many things, the largest being the portal-room and the above-mentioned control room. The control room, while grand in itself, held a sense of technology and militarily so far absent from the lower level. The portal room was all begot in glowing marble, lined with gold and studded with gems. It was the holy grail of the Pah’jera people.
            Lezanne and her comrades, having done all they could to deflect the enemy’s attacks, grabbed their bundles of possessions and hurried out, Major Degrass starting the auto-destruct. Missiles had begun to rocket the city sending parts of it down in flames, but once the enemy knew they were gone, they would stop their firing and try to get into the Pah’jera database. But if all went well, the people would be millions of miles away and the planet would be gone, along with the entire enemy’s fleet.
            The portal hummed to life, a glowing pit of light in the middle of the room. Once it was on the captain leaned over it, switching his radio to a different channel.
            “Hello. This is the Pah’jera portal, we request permission to come through.”
            There was a small pause then: “Permission granted, sir”.
            A squad of troopers led the way through the portal. Once on the other side they radioed back: “All’s clear sir. It does seem to be deserted, though…” The man’s slightly troubled voice trailed off into the static.
            Captain Nexley motioned for the common-people to go through next. The infant children whimpered, but the older ones gasped with expressions of ‘cool’ and ‘awesome’. The people were going in a steady stream through when a huge explosion rocked the tower. Women screamed, supplies toppled, and a few fell into the portal in a very ungainly manner.
            “Hurry!” Captain Nexley said. The stream of people sped to maximum capacity. Another explosion, then another rocked the city. Patches of marble began to fall from the ceiling, smashing into the floor. Loud gunfire exploded in the hallway. Everyone raced through the portal at maximum capacity. The scientists were soon the last on deck, loading the few necessary supplies through.
            “Leave the ration-carts!” Nexley yelled. “If the Nal’jera are on the other side, they should be able to provide for us!”
            Another huge explosion rocketed the building. Huge patches of the ceiling fell down, and then part of the tower’s wall collapsed. The smell of acid and explosions wafted into the room. Overhead the enemy’s planes circled menacingly while a few of their own held back one last area of the city.
            Lezanne and her comrades turned and fled towards the portal. As Lezanne stepped into it, she heard an explosion and looked back to see the tower’s roof falling speedily towards her. Then everything was enveloped in gold light. Then she was on the other side and with a rumble and a flicker, the portal went out.
            The other people looked surprised at its disappearance.
            “The roof, of the tower,” Lezanne panted “Was falling down upon it, last I saw.” Captain Nexley nodded.
            “So be it.”

            The main group of civilians huddled together in the main room while bands of scientists and soldiers spread out through the hallways, scanning for signs for the Nal’jera. Radios softly cackled; men flitted through the shadows. The Nal’jera had always been more bonded with nature; whilst the Pah'jera had pushed their society to become the most technologically advanced in the universe. They had come close but the Krahkulhain, their deadly enemies, had discovered a new set of laser weapons and had forced the Pah’jera to evacuate their planet.
            Lezanne’s group headed down a darkened hallway, it twisted and turned then went up a flight of curly stairs. At the top an open door led into a large well-lit room. Inside sat a single occupant: a young girl of about eleven. She turned and stood when the group entered. Her dress was large and ornate, made from gold and red brocade and layers of blue velvet. She had a large headdress on and her face was tattooed and painted wildly.
            She bowed. “Welcome, Pah’jera.” Her voice was young, but calm and steady. “I am Sensi, the Nal’trisha of the Nal’jera. I am the tower-guardian.”
            Lezanne returned: “I am Lezanne, a scientist of the tower of the Pah’jera. These are a handful of our elite soldiers.” then turned to the men behind her. “Go and get Captain Nexley, he will wish to speak with this girl.” The soldiers turned and departed, only one staying positioned outside the door. Lezanne turned to Sensi. The girl smiled.
            “It is a great honor to be the first Nal’trisha to welcome the Pah’jera. The elders will be pleased. Tell me, why did you leave your world? There is not trouble on your side of the galaxy, is there?”
            “Alas.” Lezanne replied, trying to speak in a more dignified manner in the girl’s presence. “The Krahkulhain, darn them, developed bigger blaster cannons and owned us. We had to scram. Tiki Torchers!”
            The girl’s face saddened. “Are these all of your people?”
            “Yes. The other ones got crunchified in the battle.”
            There was silence as the girl stood thinking for a moment. Lezanne’s eyes wandered around the room. Captain Nexley appeared at the door. Lezanne beckoned him forward.
            “Sensi, this is Captain Nexley, the leader of our people.” Sensi bowed and smiled.
            “I am Sensi, the Nal’trisha of the Nal’jera, the tower-guardian. We are pleased to bid you welcome.” She smiled then glanced outside. “We must start now if we are to reach the settlement by nightfall. See, nobody lives in the tower anymore, only each year a girl is picked to be the Nal’trisha and protect the tower.”
            Captain Nexley nodded in understanding. “Let us be going, then.”


            The journey was not long, and led through rolling green hills converted in wildflowers while patches of evergreen dotted the valleys. As night approached, the group beheld a large city glistening on the edge of a long lake. Sensi led the way down into the center, where a golden palace gleamed. Captain Nexley took a handful of warriors and a few of his chief scientists, including Lezanne. They followed Sensi into the court.
            Everything was glinting gold, red and blue. Women in ornate costume flitted about, and women guards stood at the doors. When they were admitted to the throne room, the monarch of the city was a woman, too. The group bowed. Sensi walked to the queen and quietly told her what had happened. When she had finished, the queen turned to her guests.
            “I have heard the story from this Nal’trisha. Welcome, travelers. We are glad to welcome you. Sensi tells me that the portal got destroyed. So be it. The Nal’jera are ready to welcome you forever. Come; let us gather together in celebration.” She stood and everyone followed her out.
            “So after years of war, we finally find a home.” Captain Nexley said to himself. He smiled. He let himself relax for the first time in… forever.

A Round of Interesting Blog Posts 5.

Hey folks, I'm back! *grins crookedly* Okay, technically I didn't go anywhere but you get the general idea. ;) So, on to the links to all the interesting blog posts I've been reading this week!

Book reviews first. I love books {obviously} and here are some intriguing reviews that caught my eye. First up is a review by Casey over at Writing for Christ ~ The Audience of One:
The second one is a well-done review by Noah over at Books I recommend:
The third review, which includes a cool book-trailer, can be found at Booktalk and More:
Reviews by Jane has a comical book on her shelf that looks grand:
And Mr. Darcy rides again over at Elenatintil's blog:

Of course, in the midst of book reviews, I also come across some posts containing good advice. Casey from Writing for Christ ~ The Audience of One has some wise advice everyone should read and apply to their lives, especially grads:
Young Ladies Christian Fellowship has a reassuring post with some sound words of wisdom:
The folks over at Bloom! have a fun riddle/poem that will get you thinking:
And my family-friend Mr. Thorell over at Strictly Speaking has a humorous outlook on work ethics:

And, of course, what would one do without those wonderfully random but grand posts that have a category all their own? The sweet sister of one of my best friends shares her baking day adventures over at the Hellwig Family Blog:
Mr. Thorell from Strickly Speaking has a very funny but oh so thought-provoking post on our interesting English language; let's see if you get the kicker at the end:
And another of my best friends has started a blog all about one of her epic novels! Read part one of her story at Stardust and Ashes:

Until next week, my fellow Bloggers! Keep blogging folks and remember; I'm always watching, even if I don't/can't comment. ;)

Speaking of commenting: for those of you who have blogs with the comment menu set to drop down rather than open in separate window or pop-up menu, please be aware that Blogger is not letting me comment on your blogs via the drop-down menus. So even though I read your post, I can't comment. I'm trying to figure out what's up with that so I'll get back to you later if I learn anything. God bless!

Sunday, June 19, 2011

Tower Challenge Fifth Submission!

Hey all! Here is the fifth submission for my challenge, which officially ended yesterday but if you still want to get your submission to me then please, please send it to me or post it to your blog or other social networking site and send me the link. I'd be happy to spend the rest of the month posting last-minute submissions. ;) This submission is by a lovely young lady over at the Fairytale Novels Forum and she's obviously a good writer and very creative.




Tower of Tears
by elf Ranger Sulwen
The sun felt warm on my face. The wind played with my hair as it danced past. The scent of wild violets and forget-me-nots drifted up to me and filled my soul with content. It was a beautiful day.

I opened my eyes and gazed around the flower-strewn hill. I yearned to take just one step in that soft grass and to meet one of those flowers face to face. It was such a beautiful day, but I was here, and here I would remain.

Here was a tower, the only home I’d ever known. It was high on a hill above a far village, with only small bushes, wild flowers, and lots of green grass. Rabbits, birds, and sometimes a stray pony inhabited the fruitful area and provided me with some entertainment.

I turned away from the wide open window I had been sitting at and back into the tower itself. It was simple, really. It had a small, square fireplace in the center for during the cold winter. A rough table with two chairs sat near it. There was a bookshelf crammed with books. My bed, shaped like a half-moon to fit into the curving wall, was tucked near the opposite window. Near it was a wardrobe and mirror.
To my left was the spiraling stairs that led down to the door. The door I had never stepped through, though it had been opened many times before.

‘Why?’ I thought to myself, though I knew the answer. ‘Why is it that others get to walk free in the world and I have to stay up here?’
The sound of cheerful whistling brought me out of my brooding and back to the window. I leaned out and looked down at the footpath, knowing already who it would be.

A mop of brown hair with a tint of red was making its way up the path to the tower. I smiled brightly when I saw it.

“Dan!” I called to him.

He looked up and waved. I waved back and flew down the tower steps.

I reached the door just as the key turned in the lock. The door opened, and I had that familiar fleeting moment when I was staring out at the sun-kissed world with the wide, free sky and wild things. My heart was gripped with over-powering desire to run into it and never look back. Then Dan stepped inside and closed the door, and the feeling was gone, the thought dying as quickly as it had come alive.

Dan smiled. “It’s a nice day, isn’t it?”

I nodded. “Yes, absolutely gorgeous.” I felt my resentment at having to enjoy it from inside well up inside me and I quickly turned and went up the stairs to hide my feelings. Dan followed.

“Sit down,” I offered, motioning to a chair.

“Thanks,” he said, placing his basket on the table and taking a seat.

The basket was why he was here. It was my week’s supply of food. He always brought it to me. There were other villagers who had the responsibility to bring me things, but he was the only one who was comfortable around me. The others usually made tense conversation or simply left the basket inside the door before quickly retreating down to the village again.

So although Dan was only supposed to bring me food, he often volunteered to bring me my other supplies as well. As a result, we were very good friends.

And yet I always felt a distance between us. He couldn’t quite think of me as just another person he knew. My life was so strange, in his mind I was placed in a special category. I hated it, but I was resigned to it. After all, who could blame him? I was different, boarding on weird.

I silently cursed the neighboring kingdom, the whole reason why I was here. I was told years ago that my parents, rich royalty with a large army, had been at war with the country my tower was now in. A brave soldier had snuck into the castle grounds, stole me as I was out playing, and had brought me back to this tower, where I was to stay until a ransom was paid and a truce signed. My parents had agreed, and I had been watched over in the tower, expecting to be reclaimed in a few weeks. But the weeks had dragged to months, and finally a year. They tried to make contact with my parents, but every messenger was turned away at the border despite every attempt. Finally it came out that my kingdom had been overrun and my parents had fled, disappearing into the wilderness. I would never be ransomed; I was to be forever unclaimed.

I broke out of these thoughts and smiled at Dan again. I prepared us both tea and sat in the other chair. We chatted without thought to the time and to me there was nothing else in the room but his flashing smile and deep green eyes. I was so filled with joy at his presence I forgot all about my troubles and desires. There was only one dream I was thinking of.

Then Dan looked around and said, “Oh goodness, it’s six o’clock already! I should be home; mother will have dinner on the table.”
I stood and faked a smile as he pulled on his cape and started down the stairs. I followed him down, each step seeming to weigh my heart down heavier. I watched with a frozen expression as he took the key out of his pocket and unlocked the door. He opened it and took a step out before stopping and saying good-bye. I numbly said good-bye to him.

“I’ll try to get away tomorrow and come and see you,” he said.

Now my smile was real, and I tried to hide the flush in my face and tears in my eyes. He didn’t know how much I depended on him saying that and how moved I was that he cared enough to say it.

“Thank you,” I said, not allowing my voice to quiver. I wanted to cry. But instead I smiled bravely and brightly. “I hope so, but don’t go out of your way just for me.” Inside I thought, ‘Please go out of your way!’

He smiled again and stepped out. Again that fleeting moment came as I stared out into the dusk at the beautiful freedom staring me back in the face. Then the door closed and locked, leaving me again in darkness. But the physical darkness was nothing compared to the darkness filling my soul.

I slowly dragged myself back up the stairs and looked out the window. Dan’s bright head was just disappearing into the trees around the town. Soon he would be with his family inside a warm house with warm food and he would forget all about me. But I would be here all alone, thinking only of him. I stared out into the sunset sinking below the distant hills and mountains. Through my tears, I looked up at the first stars shining far above me.

Then I sank down into the window seat and looked out at the twilight. I watched the world for a long time. I watched it transform into night and slowly go to sleep. The moon came out and turned my black hair into silver. Every wild flower, every tree, every hill, every blade of grass was outlined with moonlight. It was beautiful, but it could not mend my broken heart. I stayed awake for hours, until finally I cried myself to sleep.

Thursday, June 16, 2011

Tower Challenge Fourth Submission!

I know I haven't been posting at all this week but its a very busy week for me and I promise I'll be back to posting more regularly next week. But for now, do enjoy this wonderful short story by one of my best friends, Gabrielle Hellwig. Check out her blog, Legend of a Seamstress, while you're online please. ;)

Tower Challenge Submission
  by Gabrielle Hellwig.

My name is Avi. It means ‘bird’ and Mamma calls me her little bird. That is because I’ve always dreamed of taking wing from our tower and flying away to explore the great, wide world outside.



My father, mother, Little Sister, and I live in a tower in the heart of the Southern Forest. Nothing penetrates here except the sun, rain, and wild animals. I know a tower sounds like a strange home to most of you, but for me and Little Sister, it has always been home. Let me tell you how we came to live here.



Long, long ago, before Father and Mother were married, Father was the king’s bodyguard. There were very close and Father accompanied him everywhere. One evening, Father happened upon one man beating up another. The poor, bloodied victim was near death and no longer able to defend himself. Father made a dash for his attacker but the man escaped, the deepening darkness and a near alley favoring him. The other was already dead, and before Father had made up his mind what to do, several of the dead soul’s kin chanced upon the two. They did not wait for an explanation, but accused Father of murdering their kinsman. They brought him to court and demanded justice. The judge ruled in their favor, and against Father, and a day was set for his execution. That morning, however, Father escaped, taking with him our Mother, to whom he was at that time betrothed. They spent many months in hiding around the country before they were able to take ship to the remote and mostly undiscovered island we now call home.



Here, in our tower, they were married, with the sun and clouds, the birds, squirrels, and deer, and our Maker above as witnesses of their sacred union. Here, in our tower, Little Sister and I were born and have been raised. We had a baby brother too, but he was born early - sick and frail, and lived barely a day. The bedroom Little Sister and I share overlooks the mossy patch of ground and the polished tombstone that mark his resting place.



Life here in our tower is far from dull. Our days are filled with lessons from Mother and games with Father. Mother is teaching us fine sewing, the art of the flute and of baking, and to do our sums. Then Father takes us outside to the sunny clearing we call our yard. There, we play hide-and-seek until we all fall laughing and breathless on the soft turf. Then, Father will find mushrooms, leaves, flowers, or even interesting toads and snakes and teach us science in such an engaging way that Mother has to call us in for our midday meal.



And often, Little Sister and I will play in our yard. A rippling, whispering rivulet of fresh water runs through our yard and we like to float sticks or leaves along, pretending they are our merchant ships. In the spring, we search for tiny wildflowers, each one unique, nestled in the crannies and cracks along the aged base of our stone tower. Just yesterday, I found a single pink one twining over the gap in a stone step.  It had petals shaped like points of a star and the center was a mass of sparkling gold like a fallen gem.



On the days when it rains, the rain pattering comfortingly on the roof and against our windows, Little Sister and I must occupy ourselves inside. Sometimes, we race up and down the cold, flat stone steps and through the numerous corridors playing hide-and-seek. At other times, we’ll play a counting game with stones on the tiled floor of the kitchen or lean our elbows on the windowsill of our bedroom, dreamily counting the falling droplets.



No, it is not that life here in our tower is dull. I do not think I would trade it for any other life. But I should like to see the world – the town where Mother and Father were born and grew up, the land they knew and loved. Perhaps some day, we shall all visit that land. For now, we would love to have you visit us here in our tower in the heart of the Southern Forest.

Saturday, June 11, 2011

The Vigilante's Bride Book Review.

Title: The Vigilante’s Bride.
Author: Yvonne Harris.
Genre: Christian, Fiction, Western, Romance, Drama, Action/Adventure.
Plot: Eighteen year old Emily McCarthy reluctantly agrees to leave the only home she’s ever known and answer a mail order bride notice, traveling all the way from Chicago to Montana on a train in December of 1884. On the first day of her arrival, while she is on her way to meet her intended husband, the stagecoach she is riding in gets held up and Emily McCarthy is kidnapped by Luke Sullivan. From the moment he swoops her off her feet that dark Christmas Eve night, Emily finds herself on an adventure she never expected. Taken by her mysterious captor to New Hope, an orphanage where Sullivan grew up, Emily befriends Molly who runs the place, and engages in frequent sparring matches with Sullivan. She finally settles in however and takes up teaching the twenty-four lively orphans and two Crow Indian boys, the sons of chief Black Otter.
Sullivan, for his part, never intended that night to kidnap Emily. All he wanted to do was take back the money Bart Axel, Emily’s intended husband, stole from his father years ago. When he learned who Emily was heading off to marry, he knew he had to talk some sense into the naïve girl before she got herself into trouble. What Sullivan and the locals all know but the folks in Chicago don’t is that Axel is a villain. A former vigilante and trail boss, Sullivan busies himself with New Hope’s dwindling herd while forcing himself not to ride over and shoot Axel himself when things start going wrong; beginning with a severe beating that nearly ends the twenty-six-year-old’s life.
On top of the usual hardships of winter, the continual dwindling of the herd and brewing trouble with Axel, Sullivan and Emily find themselves falling in love. Their troubles, however, aren’t over yet.
Likes/Dislikes: I have to be honest with you: I loved this book!! I’ve wanted to read it for months now and you can just imagine how excited I was when my Dad brought it home from the post office. Emily and Sullivan’s sparring with each other was hilarious; his sense of humor is very good and she reminds me a little of myself. Molly, Black Otter, Stuart and the other primary supporting characters are all well drawn and provided plenty of laughs as they teased Sullivan and Emily or worked together to outwit the bad guy. And this western has everything in it that a lover of classic westerns could want except for the final showdown between the hero and the villain {Axel is a really clever villain too}; I really wanted a final showdown! However, I don’t suppose Sullivan would have been able to participate with a wounded arm. There is some violence, obviously, but it’s not graphic and there are also only a few kisses, nothing graphic there either.
Rating: PG-15 and up for violence and reading level. Highly recommended!
Date Report Written: June 11, 2011.
I received this book free from the publisher. I was not required to write a positive review. The opinions expressed in the above review are my own.

Praying for Your Future Husband Book Review.

Title: Praying for Your Future Husband.
Author: Robin Jones Gunn and Tricia Goyer.
Genre: Christian, Nonfiction, Prayer.
Plot: Prayer is powerful; it’s the most powerful weapon available to Christians across the world. And the best part? It’s effective. Every day is a spiritual battle and one of the spiritual battles every unmarried woman engages in is for her future husband. So, how do we do that? In their book Mrs. Gunn and Mrs. Goyer provide us with an outline, a set of guidelines, some helpful tips, and a few inspiring true life accounts, including their own.
Laid out in thirteen easy to comprehend chapters that cover praying your future husband will be a God Lover to praying for his heart, for patience, understanding {coupled with forgiveness}, trust, loyalty and faithfulness, strength, protection {this is important as it pertains to the spiritual battles I mentioned earlier: Satan will do everything in his power to break down and take out a strong Christian man in any and every way possible}, intimacy, the List {yeah, you know what I’m talking about}, contentment, and commitment. The authors also include a list of fifty-two additional verses to pray for your future husband at the end of the book, and encourage the reader not to stop there but to write their own prayers, whatever God puts on their hearts.
The authors’ own personal stories, particularly Mrs. Goyer’s, are moving, inspiring and encouraging as we watch them search for the right man while drawing closer to God through the ups and downs of life.
Likes/Dislikes: This is a really good book. I highly recommend that every teenage or young adult unmarried woman read it. About the only thing I really didn’t like was that the authors kept switching between all these false modern translations of the Bible including NIV, MSG, NLT, CEV, GW, NASB, RSV, AMP, and NCV. My family and I believe that the KJV or NKJV are the only true, trustworthy versions of the Bible. I recommend that you read the verses in the translation with which you are most familiar and comfortable with. To download the first chapter free, please click the following link: http://waterbrookmultnomah.com/2011/02/03/sneak-peek-praying-for-your-future-husband-by-robin-jones-gunn-and-tricia-goyer/
Rating: PG-14 and up. Girls only. Highly recommended!
Date Report Written: June 11, 2011.
This book was provided free by the publishers. I was not required to write a positive review. The opinions expressed in the above review are my own.